Hawaii
If I could go anywhere in the world, I would go to the beautiful island of Hawaii. I would go there because it is so sunny, warm, and tropical. It is so pretty, and just imagine the blue oceans. There is a small lake warmed by the volcano’s, so it’s like a hot tub. Hawaii is just a dream come true!
December 18th, 2006 at 7:43 pm
I really enjoyed how you used so much expresion and the pictures you used were great I really enjoyed it!!!!!!!
-Emily p
December 18th, 2006 at 10:13 pm
this is a great paragraph. And by the way, Happy b-day on Dec. 27! =)
-Cheryl
December 20th, 2006 at 7:10 pm
Taylor, it could use some work…but I like it. I like the intence detail.
December 24th, 2006 at 10:40 am
HI! i loved your pharagrag! it had lots of detail. And you picked a nice place. HAWAII! i ben there. my brother is in the navy. he is based in hawaii. he goes underwater with sumberines. i also ben in the sumberines. they are really compacked. everything is small. and you would think they just sit in the water but they really do stuff. they bomb the bad bad bad people. also when i went to hawaii we went swimming with dolphins. have you ever done that? it is so much fun. we evan got to kiss the dolphins. they felt very smoothe! i hope you get to go to hawaii. but the plan ride is very very long! 13 hours! but its worth it!
maria
January 7th, 2007 at 7:42 pm
I like how you used alot of adjetives.
January 8th, 2007 at 4:50 pm
Good job, nice details, and i like the way you used all those adj. ’s .
-shelby